5/4/2010
1 A boy flying to australia and his pilot gets killed by a terrorists and he has to get out
2 a boy is in the last seat of a jet and going out and a hijacker comes in and he starts to turn on the jet does he try to stop the hijacker or hide
3 a guy is going boating on the ocean and his boat starts to sink and he thinks things can not get worse but they can he gets a small cut and a shark smells it from 3 miles away does he survive or not
4 a guy is going scuba diving and he taking to jail by Iran and they get put in gas chambers hoe do they escape
5 a guy is skydiving and the wind takes him away I wish that There are more books about kids who were secret agents like Alex Rider. books about kids being spy's there are books about adults being spy's but not as much kids
5/06/2010
There was a kid who was a show off at soccer when ever the kid would get scored on the kid would try to run up the field and try to score but it would not work that shows that team work is better then one person. that is why there are
lots of people on a team not just one. 5/07/2010 I wish there were more books about kids who like to camp and fish 5/7/10 A boy flying to australia and his pilot gets killed by a terrorists and he has to get out
He is flying to australia to go on vacation with his friends Mason, Jimmy ,Ike ,Noah ,Marcus Marcus and Noah are the pilots and they were going to retire after the ride to and back from australia then plan would stay at the air port for two weeks and then Noah and Marcus would fly the plan back to J.F.K internation air port
Tallest building
Jack The beast good guy
Mason the beast side kick
Jimmy the villain
Joe the villains side kick
Bill The pilot
Bob the other pilot
You have a ton of ideas. Excited to see you are looking forward to writing something. These ideas all feel a little violent. Make sure to keep it positive. You can write about violence when you are older. Ms. Schwieters
Why do you think there aren't books about kids being spy's? It is a tad unrealistic in my opinion. Try and stick with something you know about- Hockey? Being the oldest of three kids? -Ms. Schwieters
I like your soccer idea. You can use all you know about the game and make the story realistic-Ms Schwieters
The list of kids in your story is an interesting start. Perhaps the pilot could get sick instead of killed. I need yo to stay away from the violence.- Why is the boy flying to Australia? Are all his fiends coming along? Is he scared?- Focus on devloping one character.-Ms. Schwieters
Where are your character traits? You are telling your story already without developing a character. Remember what Ms. T said about JK Rowling. Let the story come later.-Ms. Schwieters
Internal
Smart
Cocky
25% Germen
25% Irish
External
Good at sports
knows how to scuba dive
Black Belt at Karate
Can drive a plane,car,truck,RV,Boat and anything the has a motor
Good at fixing things
Some of your external things are internal characteristics. You can tell me what your character looks like. What are your character's weaknesses?-Ms Schwieters
Jack's Wants
To have a hockey rink in his back yard.
A limo and a driver.
1 A boy flying to australia and his pilot gets killed by a terrorists and he has to get out
2 a boy is in the last seat of a jet and going out and a hijacker comes in and he starts to turn on the jet does he try to stop the hijacker or hide
3 a guy is going boating on the ocean and his boat starts to sink and he thinks things can not get worse but they can he gets a small cut and a shark smells it from 3 miles away does he survive or not
4 a guy is going scuba diving and he taking to jail by Iran and they get put in gas chambers hoe do they escape
5 a guy is skydiving and the wind takes him away
I wish that There are more books about kids who were secret agents like Alex Rider. books about kids being spy's there are books about adults being spy's but not as much kids
5/06/2010
There was a kid who was a show off at soccer when ever the kid would get scored on the kid would try to run up the field and try to score but it would not work that shows that team work is better then one person. that is why there are
lots of people on a team not just one.
5/07/2010
I wish there were more books about kids who like to camp and fish
5/7/10
A boy flying to australia and his pilot gets killed by a terrorists and he has to get out
He is flying to australia to go on vacation with his friends Mason, Jimmy ,Ike ,Noah ,Marcus Marcus and Noah are the pilots and they were going to retire after the ride to and back from australia then plan would stay at the air port for two weeks and then Noah and Marcus would fly the plan back to J.F.K internation air port
Tallest building
You have a ton of ideas. Excited to see you are looking forward to writing something. These ideas all feel a little violent. Make sure to keep it positive. You can write about violence when you are older. Ms. Schwieters
Why do you think there aren't books about kids being spy's? It is a tad unrealistic in my opinion. Try and stick with something you know about- Hockey? Being the oldest of three kids? -Ms. Schwieters
I like your soccer idea. You can use all you know about the game and make the story realistic-Ms Schwieters
The list of kids in your story is an interesting start. Perhaps the pilot could get sick instead of killed. I need yo to stay away from the violence.- Why is the boy flying to Australia? Are all his fiends coming along? Is he scared?- Focus on devloping one character.-Ms. Schwieters
Where are your character traits? You are telling your story already without developing a character. Remember what Ms. T said about JK Rowling. Let the story come later.-Ms. Schwieters
Internal
External
Some of your external things are internal characteristics. You can tell me what your character looks like. What are your character's weaknesses?-Ms Schwieters
Jack's Wants
To have a hockey rink in his back yard.
A limo and a driver.
Jack looks out the window